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Old 03-26-2007, 04:11 PM
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Hi Lonnie,
I just had a click jaunt over to your site, and please forgive me, but my initial reaction was...not another sales letter and with AdSense. Of course, I'm jaded.

The red on the site can add a bit of spice, but in this case, I found it to be distracting.

As for the content (I didn't read through all of it), I did notice some grammatical/spelling errors littered throughout the front page. It may be a good idea to do some proofreading, or have someone else who hasn't seen the copy a number of times proofread it. It's very easy to make mistakes when you've read something a number of times because the eyes tend to skim more instead of reading word for word.

Another recommendation would be to use headings (i.e. h2, h3, and so forth) to make the information easily scannable. For instance, "So, what are the secrets of affiliate marketing residual income?" could easily be a second or third level heading because it explains what the next section will be about.

My next question would be, what are the purposes of the two lower blocks in the side column? As far as I can tell, neither add any additional value to the site. I actually expected them to be links which would take me to additional information and was disappointed when they weren't.

To finish up, I'd consider adding a bit more information about you and why someone should follow your advice. So far, all we know is that you supplement your income through affiliate marketing, but nothing specific. How long have you been at it, what are some of your successes, your strengths, reasons we should trust what you say, and so forth.

For a first site, you've done a nice job. Some polishing and you'll have a winner on your hands.

Hope it helps.

~ Teli

P.S. You should consider adding your signature via your Profile control panel, then you won't need to edit your entries to add one.
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