Hi Donny
It looks to much like a typical ebook sales page, from a personal point of view i find that negative, as i associate that type of ebook sales pages as the type of ebooks that promise a lot but provide nothing of value. Basically scam pages.
Since a picture says so much more check out a
typical over hyped ebook/software page.
And you'll see that the overall look of your page and message matches to the linked page.
Make a page that is more of the opposite of a typical ebook sales page.
Create a unique website page(s) and drop the idea of making a typical squeeze page.
At least your sales page isn't three miles long
Oh, and welcome to the forum