Hi Randeg,
I think all of this:
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is too long, doesn't tell the user anything new, and worst of all, pushes all of your products below the fold. You can pretty much count on people looking at your headline, the pictures, and the prices. And that's about it. If someone reads the copy, it will be because they're thinking about buying one of your products and NOW want to know more about you.
JMO, and meant only in the most constructive way,
iReef