My First Sales Page - Suggestions?

[Edwin]

Much better Donny!

I would add to the Money Back Guaranteed image a small "Learn More" link to explain how the money back guarantee process works, using a tool tip kind of display.

[Linda Buquet]

Just happened to notice a typo that won't work to your advantage.

Last paragraph - YOUR CALL TO ACTION should be a positive.

It says: "At an inflated price of $97, you can start reading right away."

Think you meant discounted price, reduced price, special price or limited time offer.

[kinkarso]

Thanks .

Linda: Yes, that is correct. I am testing a new 'invitation system'. $97 is the 'buy-in' price with no bonuses included. Basically if someone wanted to buy my product, they must be invited & allowed to buy it. So far, the conversion rates have proved to be quite promising compared to the normal way to do it.

Thank you,
Donny

[Linda Buquet]

But did you mean to say INFLATED?

Inflated means you have a HIGHER than normal price!

[kinkarso]

It's a higher price compared to the normal 'invitation' price. Should I use a different word? Maybe it is a bit of a put-off .

[Edwin]

It's definitely a put-off

You're basically saying, overpriced price

[kinkarso]

Alright .

The only problem is, I need to convey the message that that is NOT the standard price for my product. The standard price is significantly lower. I need to get the message out there that the MAIN way to get my ebook is through an invite. The $97 price is just a "buy-in" price for people who can't wait. Do you have any suggestions as to which words to use?

Thank you,
Donny

[Linda Buquet]

I think it's a confusing sales strategy.

1st you say you are NOT selling it.

Then you say MAYBE you can get if you are lucky enough to get an invite.

Then you say well I lied you can buy it right now if you want to pay more.

I haven't seen this method before but I'm also pretty anti ebooks and not in that biz,
so can't offer a good solution. It just seems convoluted to me.

Whats the real goal? To collect emails by asking them to request an invite?
Or to really sell the product or both?

[kinkarso]

Yeah, I'm trying something new to see how conversion rates go (so far so good with my private list I test-launched to). I'm trying to promote both.

[Mushroom]

I would say you are on the track to make money. Friends no, money yes.

The web is full of the gullible. Those that want to make money, and don't know how. So you are priced at a level that most anyone can afford, and many will try it because they need to start somewhere.

10,000 at 97.00 = well you do the math. This is a small number use 100,000 at 97.

It is kind of the way politics work. Promise everything, and don't worry about performing because the cost to recoup $97.00 is not worth the hassel.

I am not against making money. Making money is what makes the world go around and pays for the ticket to ride. For me there is a better way to make money, and for me to accept money I want the person giving me money to recieve a value.

I wish you all the best of what life has to offer, and you have many years ahead of you to enjoy.